Anyone good with writing? xD

SummerMoon · August 2009

So I had AP U.S History work for the summer, and I decided that I would work on it with a friend, to make it less traumatizing for me xD Well, when we finished a few days ago, we emailed our work to the teacher to get it turned in early. Apparently, they were too closely worded together and so he told us that one of the two of us had to reword EVERYTHING. Just my luck eh? And if that wasn't enough, my laptop crashed the morning after I started re writing everything. So as you could probably guess, I've lost probably all of my motivation xD If anyone is good with writing, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE help me reword the following paragraphs? And I'm not asking for you to reword the entire thing. Bits and pieces would do WONDERS for me :P 1. At the time of European contact, the North American Indians represented over two thousand separate cultures, spoke several hundred different languages, and made their livings in scores of fundamentally different environments. There were many diverse tribes with different names, there was the Lakota, Sioux, Cherokee, Hopi, and many more. The different tribes survived in many different ways, some hunted after buffalo while other primarily used farming as a source of sustenance. The tribes that used hunting, relied on the development of technology in order for the hunting of food to be easier. The spear, the Folsom, and lances were all examples of the weapons that Indians used to kill buffalo. Other Indian tribes however used farming as a source of food. These Indians lived in areas where plants could grow vividly due to the abundance of water and sunlight. The effort needed to grow such vegetables and herbs require much less energy than hunting did, which is the reason why some tribes switched from hunting to farming such as the Cahokia. So in order for everyone to contribute, the tribe was divided into different clans. Each clan was responsible for different social, political, or ritual functions. Clans were also an important way of binding together the people of several communities into loose ethnic and territorial alliances. Overall the North American Indians were all hard-working people who put the need of their culture before themselves. The Indians lived closely together which made them a strong body of unity. 2. The motives for European exploration can not be described only using one explanation. There are a few different reasons, but usually being for imperialism. One of the first European nations to explore was Portugal. Portugal had searched the oceans for lucrative gold and slave trades from northwestern Africa. By the time of Prince Henryâ€™s death in the year 1460, Portugal had colonized the Atlantic islands of the Azores and the Madeiras and founded bases along the western African â€œGold Coast.â€

NickelbackLuver · August 2009

ahh, If history wasnt my least favorite subject, I would help >.<

reina__ · August 2009

I shall help. I'm doing some right now..;)

Kaley1 · August 2009

During the European contact, the North American Indians showed over two thousand seperate cultures, spoke severlal different languages, and made a living in scores of extremely different environments. There were many tribes with different names, such as the Lakota, Sioux, Cherokee, Hopi, and many more. The different tribes survived in a lot of different ways, some hunted buffalo while others primarily used farming as a source of sustenance. The tribes that used hunting, depended on the development of technology in order for the hunting of food to be easier. The spear, the Folsom, and lances were all examples of the weapons that Indians used to kill buffalo. Other Indian tribes used farming as a source of food. These Indians lived in areas where plants could grow strongly due to the abundance of water and sunlight. The effort needed to grow vegetables and herbs require much less energy than hunting did. That's why some tribes switched from hunting to farming, such as the Cahokia. So in order for everyone to participate, the tribe was divided into different groups. Each clan was responsible for different social, political, or ritual functions. Groups were also an important way of binding together the people of several communities into loose ethnic and national alliances. Overall the North American Indians were hard-working people who put the need of their culture before themselves. The Indians lived closely together which made them a strong body of peace. The motives for European exploration can not be described only using one explanation. There are a few different reasons, but usually being for imperialism. One of the first European nations to explore was Portugal. Portugal had searched the oceans for advantageous gold and slave trades from northwestern Africa. By the time of Prince Henryâ€™s death in 1460, Portugal had colonized the Atlantic islands of the Azores and the Madeiras and founded bases along the western African â€œGold Coast.â€

reina__ · August 2009

Moonlight wrote:

 1. At the time of European contact, the North American Indians represented over two thousand separate cultures, spoke several hundred different languages, and made their livings in scores of fundamentally different environments. There were many diverse tribes with different names, there was the Lakota, Sioux, Cherokee, Hopi, and many more. The different tribes survived in many different ways, some hunted after buffalo while other primarily used farming as a source of sustenance. The tribes that used hunting, relied on the development of technology in order for the hunting of food to be easier. The spear, the Folsom, and lances were all examples of the weapons that Indians used to kill buffalo. Other Indian tribes however used farming as a source of food. These Indians lived in areas where plants could grow vividly due to the abundance of water and sunlight. The effort needed to grow such vegetables and herbs require much less energy than hunting did, which is the reason why some tribes switched from hunting to farming such as the Cahokia. So in order for everyone to contribute, the tribe was divided into different clans. Each clan was responsible for different social, political, or ritual functions. Clans were also an important way of binding together the people of several communities into loose ethnic and territorial alliances. Overall the North American Indians were all hard-working people who put the need of their culture before themselves. The Indians lived closely together which made them a strong body of unity.

Before European contact was established, the North American First Nations were characterized by an extensive amount of very different sociological groups. Within this uncountable number of cultures about the heartland of North America, there were hundreds if not thousands of languages, and each group (often referred to as 'band' or 'tribe') founded their habitat in diverse, distinctive environments. Some of the more well-known First Nation bands, including the Lakota, the Sioux, Cherokee, are just a minority compared to all the tribal bands, nations, and alliances between different sociocultural groups. Each band was situated in a specific area of North America, so they had to adapt to their environments, the animals within it, the weather, and the vegetation and landscapes. They relied on their surroundings for sustinence. For example, the Nuu-chah-nulth tribe, native to the Pacific Northwest on the coast of Vancouver Island, depended widely on salmon. They also traditionally ate various land animals, edible plants, waterfowl, and other seafoods. In many tribes, such as the Blackfoot, buffalo proved to be a vital source for food obviously, but also for bones to make knives and dishes, organs to create bags, and the hide for coats and clothing. In this case, hunting with spears was the most dependable technique to catch and kill a buffalo. Other First Nation tribes, however, used farming as the main source of food. Oftentimes these tribes lived within lands of very fertile, rich soil due to the abundance of rain and sunlight. One tribe in particular, the Cahokia (native to Mississippi), was able to produce a surplus of vegetables and herbs, which required much less effort than hunting, so they continued with large-scale horticulture and all its benefits. Each tribe was divided into different clans, which guaranteed every type of person within it to be able to participate. Each clan was responsible for specific social, political, or ritual functions. Clans were also an important way of forming ethnic and territorial alliances, which became useful when trading goods and participating in potlatches. For example, First Nation tribes that lived on the coast had different goods than the tribes that lived in the belly of North America in the fields and plains. Coastal goods included salmon, oolichan (a very oily, nutritious fish prized in the Northwest), seaweed, whales, and distinct fruits and vegetables, which were traded with peoples of the interior lands, for products such as pemmican, wool, buffalo-hide coats, knives, dishes, and more. Throughout the ages, North American First Nations were extremely diligent, hard-working people who committed their lives to their sociological groups, through hunting, farming, food-collecting, trading. They established integrity and peace among each other, and lived together in utmost harmony, undeterred by their fundamental differences. Did I just write an essay? Oh well, you can say that's one paragraph. I took BC First Nations as a social class. I loved it, since I'm a bit of FN too! P.s. Don't call them Indians. That was when Columbus landed in North America and thought he was in India... that's why he called the people here "Indians." First Nations is the most polite form.

Hope that works.

SummerMoon · August 2009

:shock: Thank you! Both of you! You have NO IDEA how much this helps me XD And i really hope like you didn't feel like you were actually doing my homework LOL That wasn't the purpose of this at all xD <3333 Thanks soooo much!

reina__ · August 2009

Just use thesaurus.com and research around... and make sure you don't say the same word every sentence. You can make it look really professional that way. I'm 1 year out of high school and wished I'd used the thesaurus more in writing. :P GL! Hope the teacher likes it.

Kaley1 · August 2009

Yu're welcome.

GoodLuck<3

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