Animal Rights (Junior Research Project) (WIP) (Critique)

We have to do a Junior Research Project at my school. My topic is Animal Rights. When I post this, I am <span style="font-weight:bold"><span style="color:red">NOT</span></span> looking for people to tell my that my thoughts and view on this is wrong. I am <span style="font-weight:bold"><span style="color:red">NOT</span></span> looking to start a fight. I <span style="font-weight:bold"><span style="color:green">AM</span></span> looking for critique as far as sentence fluency, the six writing traits, spelling, and grammar are concerned. This report is made with information pulled from books and off the internet, and my actual essay paper will include a Works Cited page, as is required. This paper is (obviously) unfinished, as I am still working on the research portion of this.<br><br><span style="font-weight:bold">Here we go:</span><br><br>According to the Humane Society of the United States, as of March 17, 2008, nearly thirty-nine percent of households own at least one dog, and almost thirty-four percent own at least a single cat, in the United States alone. Assuming you are one of these people with a cold nose and whiskery face in your family, you would probably agree that animals have their own personalities, their own dispositions. Some dogs are funny, always bouncing around and making the humans around them laugh until their sides hurt. Other cats are serious, and are more likely to watch those former pets with a feline expression that seems to ask, "Are you kidding me?" This doesn't just include dogs and cats, but any other animal you may have let into your home, including ferrets, rodents, birds, horses, goats, cows, and even chickens. As important facets in our lives, we do not want our animals, our pets, to be harmed any more than we would wish harm on a family member of the human variety. However, are we taking it too far with the animal rights movements?<br><br>(TBC)