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SunnyDaysDontLie · June 2008

Title: A Day in the Wild Lead chary: Casper. Here is the intro: My name is Casper, and I guess you know my story. I was born 3 years ago, on Halloween, one minute to midnight. I am the only horse known to have a pitch black coat, and blue eyes. I was wild, and gentle. I was wild with people I don't know, and gentle with my owner, Sable Cowener.

SunnyDaysDontLie · June 2008

Here is another update: My name is Casper, and I guess you know my story. I was born 3 years ago today, on Halloween, one minute to midnight. I am the only horse known to have a pitch black coat, and blue eyes. I was wild, and gentle. I was wild with people I don't know, and gentle with my owner, Sable Cowener. Sable was a sweet girl of 13, bright red hair and emerald green eyes. But, why did I run away? I ran. And ran, and ran. The wild horses were not far from here, and I could smell them. My nostrels flairing, I jumped the fence, cleared the fence, and galloped off into the wild. Jack London described the wild vividly, almost melencholy, in a sense. I would have not survived as a dog, with my mellow personality and mild manner. I was spooked by an unexpected breeze in the summer, a running leaf in the fall, the first flake of winter, and the first bud on a passing tree. I would have not survived, no, never. So, how did I survive a day-- alone, in the wild. Well, I describe it as pure luck... I knew Sable would be worried to the point where she vomits, to the point of suicide, which is why I did not stay forever.

Jazz · June 2008

Eh, kinda short, and I found it hard to understand, without much of a plot.

SunnyDaysDontLie · June 2008

*cough* Im posting it as I go along. Have you ever read the Tell Tale Heart by Poe(<3)? Here: <a href="http://www.literature.org/authors/poe-edgar-allan/tell-tale-heart.html"; target="_blank" class="bb-url">http://www.literature.org/authors/poe-e ... heart.html</a> It doesnt have much of a plot- and thats the Intro. Like how the Intros in the Twilight books make no sense? There you go.

Jazz · June 2008

It could just be me, obviously. But I don't like stories without plots. And the intros to Twilight made sense later, if you actually paid attention.

SunnyDaysDontLie · June 2008

Jazz, if you call getting lost in the middle of the book,(like you were actually in forks) not paying attention.. your wrong. But I honestly dont get those. Ok, CHANGE: Intro: Just the other day I lost my horse I lost my horse, I lost it somewhere Not here for sure or I would find it My horse is hungry my horse must drink The flies are horse flies you know They zoom about my head as if to say You are sitting on your saddle, you dummy Your saddle under you, beneath that â€¦ a horse -Werner Klokow Beggining: My name is Casper, and I guess you know my story. I was born 3 years ago today, on Halloween, one minute to midnight. I am the only horse known to have a pitch black coat, and blue eyes. I was wild, and gentle. I was wild with people I don't know, and gentle with my owner, Sable Cowener. Sable was a sweet girl of 13, bright red hair and emerald green eyes. But, why did I run away? I ran. And ran, and ran. The wild horses were not far from here, and I could smell them. My nostrels flairing, I jumped the fence, cleared the fence, and galloped off into the wild.

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