Poem?

UnknownDreamland · January 2008

I'm making adjustments. I'm writing on the aswell. Is there a way I ask To bring back the dead If not I ask Is there another way instead To remember one you love so much One who slipped out of your grasp One you seem to be forgetting All of his past Missing him is daily Loving him is true But wanting is a selfish thing That's what I thought I knew Learning out of story books Watching movies too Does nothing but upset me So what can I do What will revive The life into me What has deprived My spirit, hope, and joy Him I say, I miss him so And will forever more Which is why I'll ask again I say, Is there another way Changed Version Is there a way, I ask To bring back the dead If not, I ask Is there another way to remember them instead To remember that one you loved so much That one who slipped out of your grasp That one you seem to be forgetting Every moment of his past Missing him is daily And loving him is true And wanting is a selfish thing Or that's what I thought I knew Learning out of story books Watching movies too Does nothing but upset me So what can I do Happy endings are everywhere At least that's how it seems Pleasing others everywhere Except, of course, me Now I ask, what will revive The life back into me And what, I ask, has deprived My spirit, hope, and joy Him I say, I miss him so And will forever more Which is why I'll ask again I say, Is there another way

NickelbackLuver · January 2008

Writing about it feels good, doesn't it? Very nice Dreamy, it's beautiful. You can really feel the emotions in it when you read it.

UnknownDreamland · January 2008

It does.

Thanks Nickel. I already see a few spots I can switch around to make more sense.

NickelbackLuver · January 2008

Heh, it's a fact that a story never ends. Poetry is the same way ^.- There's always things to fix, and things to add on

That's the fun of it :P

tarnish · January 2008

Dreamy I have no idea why but that brought tears to my eyes.

UnknownDreamland · January 2008

It was in memory of Auzzy? I didn't include his name.. so that I could use it for any one of my loved pets.

UnknownDreamland · January 2008

Nickelback__Luver wrote:

Heh, it's a fact that a story never ends. Poetry is the same way ^.- There's always things to fix, and things to add on That's the fun of it :P

Yup.

Hrm.. things added and changed. Make more/less sense?

Dark Flame · January 2008

I loved the poem...reminded me of my friend...he died unfortunatly he was only 16 =( but the poem was AWESOME!!!

UnknownDreamland · January 2008

Thanks

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